Talk:Driver in New Hampshire multi-motorcycle crash pleads not guilty

Review of revision 4486189 [Passed]

Revision 4486189 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 18:27, 28 June 2019 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: The lede didn't explain enough about the focal event to determine its significance. Saying someone pled not-guilty to seven counts of negligent homicide gives no clue why they would have been accused of such. Did seven people die, somehow? I was at first worried I might have to not-ready the article, almost certainly preventing publication without a refocus, given the timing. Eliminating the paragraph break, thus promoting the second paragraph to second half of the lede, is simple enough I feel I can do it within reviewer's purview, and suffices although it's more detailed than the lede optimally ought to be. "Springfield District Court", mentioned in one source (and alluded to in another), is in Massachusetts. There's a picture of the guy in court in Springfield; remember, he waved extradition. When providing paragraph-sized direct quotes, please alter the shape of the outline of the quote; moving the identity of the speaker to the front is a good habit anyway, and a useful tactic for distance (though of course not sufficient in itself). As always, see detailed history of edits during review. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4486189 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 18:27, 28 June 2019 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: The lede didn't explain enough about the focal event to determine its significance. Saying someone pled not-guilty to seven counts of negligent homicide gives no clue why they would have been accused of such. Did seven people die, somehow? I was at first worried I might have to not-ready the article, almost certainly preventing publication without a refocus, given the timing. Eliminating the paragraph break, thus promoting the second paragraph to second half of the lede, is simple enough I feel I can do it within reviewer's purview, and suffices although it's more detailed than the lede optimally ought to be. "Springfield District Court", mentioned in one source (and alluded to in another), is in Massachusetts. There's a picture of the guy in court in Springfield; remember, he waved extradition. When providing paragraph-sized direct quotes, please alter the shape of the outline of the quote; moving the identity of the speaker to the front is a good habit anyway, and a useful tactic for distance (though of course not sufficient in itself). As always, see detailed history of edits during review. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

I don't move the identity of the speaker because of your and my differences about what constitutes correct punctuation. Keeping the original order allows me to accommodate your beliefs without compromising mine. If Wikinews had a big group of reviewers whose views on terminal punctuation were as varied as the general population, and there were no way to predict who would review which draft, I would probably move the speaker tag in the way you mention here every time. I had a habit of it during my early months at Wikinews.

So, I agree with the idea of moving the speaker tag. It's good. Darkfrog24 (talk) 14:35, 29 June 2019 (UTC)

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@Pi zero: about Special:Diff/4486180, do image captions count? The caption of this AP photo was repeated in multiple different sources. --DannyS712 (talk) 18:52, 28 June 2019 (UTC)

I didn't miss that. It's Springfield Massachusetts, on Monday. --Pi zero (talk) 19:20, 28 June 2019 (UTC)

Oh, thanks - I misread the captions. --DannyS712 (talk) 20:44, 28 June 2019 (UTC)

They were two different courts, one in Massachusetts for the extradition bit and one in New Hampshire for the plea. The fact that America has Springfields in every state of the union (two in some) doesn't help us much here. That's why the Simpsons is set in "Springfield." Darkfrog24 (talk) 14:36, 29 June 2019 (UTC)

I don't know in what state Tuesday's plea-entry occurred; I didn't find it in the sources. The phrasing I settled on leaves some ambiguity as to whether "in New Hampshire" means where the plea was entered, or where the crash occurred. (I've heard that about The Simpsons, yes. :-) --Pi zero (talk) 15:44, 29 June 2019 (UTC)