Talk:India: Jodhpur police arrests man for 'sacrifice' of four-year-old daughter for Allah

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Allegedly. --Pi zero (talk) 23:49, 10 June 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Phrasing

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" Initially, Ali Quereshi blamed a cat for slitting Rizwana's throat and thereby killing her." proposed by User:De Wikischim

" Initially, Ali Quereshi blamed a cat for slitting the throat and killing Rizwana." published

cur | prev)  21:47, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,984 bytes) (+10)‎ . . (Undo revision 4414046 by Acagastya (talk) Enough now - Stop monopolizing, they are not your property) (rollback 1 edit | undo | thank) (Tag: Undo) [pending review]
(cur | prev)  21:45, 16 June 2018‎ Acagastya (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,974 bytes) (-10)‎ . . (project policy does not allow rephrasing, and there is no problem with the original phrase. There are multiple ways of saying it, and frequently used way in English (IN)) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo) [pending review]
(cur | prev)  20:53, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ m . . (3,984 bytes) (+10)‎ . . (This is not too close to any source, I believe. Anyway, the original formulation did not sound good - @Acagastya, can't you just accept that?) (undo | thank) [pending review]
(cur | prev)  20:41, 16 June 2018‎ Acagastya (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,974 bytes) (+1)‎ . . (Better way to phrase it? I fail to see how. In any case, rephrasing after the 24 hour mark is not permitted. You edits also cause problems being too close to source) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo) [checked by Acagastya]
(cur | prev)  20:12, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,973 bytes) (-1)‎ . . (Undo revision 4414029 by Acagastya (talk) Indeed, no SIGNIFICANT edits. However, this just a better way of formulating the same. Or do you simply reject any corrections after the publication of an article?) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo)
(cur | prev)  20:09, 16 June 2018‎ Acagastya (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,974 bytes) (+1)‎ . . (as the author, I have the control over the style of the article. As far as rules are concerned -- "Articles which have been published for more than 24 hours should not undergo significant edits". See WN:ARCHIVE) (undo | thank) [checked by Acagastya]
(cur | prev)  20:06, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ m . . (3,973 bytes) (+1)‎ . . (whoops) (undo | thank)
(cur | prev)  20:05, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,972 bytes) (-2)‎ . . (This is the third time now within an hour I have to correct this - @Acagastya, do you have a monopoly on articles? Or is something else meant here? If so, you still need to re-phrase it) (undo | thank)
(cur | prev)  20:00, 16 June 2018‎ Acagastya (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,974 bytes) (-26)‎ . . ("I took her to the courtyard downstairs, recited a kalima, killed her" -- we do not rephrase after the 24-hour mark) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo)
(cur | prev)  19:37, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ m . . (4,000 bytes) (+26)‎ . . (Then you can put it this way. Anyway "on the ground floor" isessential information here, which should not be left out) (undo | thank)
(cur | prev)  19:32, 16 June 2018‎ Acagastya (talk | contribs | block)‎ m . . (3,974 bytes) (-28)‎ . . (Undo revision 4414014 by De Wikischim (talk) "a pool of blood" does not mean a swimming pool with blood instead of water. It means a puddle of blood on the floor. "bathing in a pool of blood" is not a proper phrase to begin with) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo) [checked by Acagastya]
(cur | prev)  19:29, 16 June 2018‎ De Wikischim (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (4,002 bytes) (+28)‎ . . (Undo revision 4414007 by Acagastya (talk). "For slitting the throat and killing Rizwana"? And what's the reason to undo my other edit? "On the ground floor" is exactly what the given source states) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo)
(cur | prev)  19:20, 16 June 2018‎ Acagastya (talk | contribs | block)‎ . . (3,974 bytes) (-28)‎ . . (Undo revision 4414001 by De Wikischim (talk) that is exactly what it means) (undo | thank) (Tag: Undo) [checked by Acagastya]

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Gryllida (talk) 11:49, 16 June 2018 (UTC)Reply