Talk:Bloomberg, Warren end US presidential campaigns following Super Tuesday

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Submitted[edit]

I have submitted the prepared content for review, so that only the "new" content needs to be looked at later. For Special:Permalink/4549414, the last paragraph is sourced from the external source listed, and the remainder comes from the prior wikinews article listed. If the current content so far looks good, please just replace the review template with a develop tag and leave a note here. If not, please let me know, so that the prepared content can be improved and not delay publication once Super Tuesday passes and the actual story is written. Thanks, --DannyS712 (talk) 00:36, 3 March 2020 (UTC)

I do not disapprove of the pre-review-of-prepared-material concept on principle. Further thought is called for on how to make it work better in practice. --Pi zero (talk) 12:41, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

CNN source[edit]

CNN is giving a bunch of brief updates. Here is how I used them:

  • "Tulsi Gabbard wins a delegate from American Samoa" -> Bloomberg won in American Samoa, Gabbard earned her first delegate (also was Bloomberg's first, can be deduced from breakdown of prior delegates)
  • "How delegates are assigned" -> paragraph re proportional awarding of delegates and 15% rule
  • "Elizabeth Warren loses Massachusetts, her home state" -> Warren lost Massachusetts
  • "Bloomberg endorses Joe Biden" -> endorsement
  • States:
    • "Sanders will win Vermont, CNN projects"
    • "Biden will win North Carolina, CNN projects"
    • "Biden wins Alabama, CNN projects"
    • "Biden will win Tennessee, CNN projects"
    • "Sanders will win Colorado, CNN projects"
    • "Biden will win Oklahoma, CNN projects"
    • "Biden will win Arkansas, CNN projects"
    • "Biden will win Minnesota, CNN projects"
    • "Sanders will win Utah, CNN projects"
    • "Biden will win Massachusetts, CNN projects. It's an upset for Warren."

--DannyS712 (talk) 02:18, 4 March 2020 (UTC)

The "It's 11:30 p.m. ET. Here's where things stand." section includes a summary --DannyS712 (talk) 04:36, 4 March 2020 (UTC)
  • "Biden wins Texas, CNN projects"

NPR source[edit]

NPR similarly gave a bunch of brief updates. Section links provided:

--DannyS712 (talk) 02:28, 4 March 2020 (UTC)

See final summary at "All 14 States Are Now Called; Biden Takes 10" - https://apps.npr.org/liveblogs/20200303-super-tuesday/#all-the-states-are-closed-164

Super Tuesday[edit]

If it is worthy enough to be mentioned in the heading, it should be explained early in the lede what it means. Reading the article, I don't have any clue what it means, or why is it so important to mention? Remember to write for the global audience.
•–• 07:10, 4 March 2020 (UTC)

Added a brief explanation of the name --DannyS712 (talk) 07:12, 4 March 2020 (UTC)

Refocus[edit]

Sourcing for the primary claims that both dropped out:

--DannyS712 (talk) 03:04, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

Copy[edit]

I gave this the a quick once-over and didn't find anything to correct. Well done, Danny. Props. Darkfrog24 (talk) 04:15, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

1,357 delegates[edit]

I'm getting the sense that our phrasing has been less than ideal: "[...] represented a total of 1,357 delegates". It seems that is the number of pledged delegates involved. This information is just barely visible in the sources, which afaics are being somewhat sloppy about it (the temptation to summarize tends corrosive, in news writing). --Pi zero (talk) 13:57, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

status[edit]

I verified the first two paragraphs. --Pi zero (talk) 14:01, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

Review of revision 4550204 [Passed][edit]