Talk:EPA declares 'emergency' asbestos cleanup in Montana town

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A couple of points:

  • I'm confused by what is meant by "the grace that ran the plant" means. who/what is the grace.
  • This article seems to imply that the really long mineral name starting with a v is a form of asbestos, where wikipedia seems to say that it is just contaminated with asbestos.this should be clarified.

Good work so far, this is well on its way to being published. Bawolff ☺☻ 21:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

    • Ok. I have fixed the article. I hope it will be published soon :) (Note: This is my first article)

Copyvios[edit]

Entire sentences have been copied from CNN, such as:

  • "Dust from the plant covered patches of grass, dusted the tops of cars and drifted through the air in a hazy cloud that became a part of residents' daily lives."
  • "did not deny that the asbestos came from its mine, but it said it acted responsibly to clean up the contamination. It paid millions in medical bills for residents of Libby and Troy, and agreed in 2008 to pay $250 million to reimburse the EPA for its cleanup efforts."

This is not permissible. --SVTCobra 21:36, 17 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed the first sentence but I kept most of it I found it a really powerful sentence and I could not find a free photo of how the scene looks. The second I will try to work on and I have tried to fix the rest of the sentences Irunongames (talk) 22:53, 17 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Well, the way to do it is to not copy-paste anything. Read it, understand it, write it in your own words. --SVTCobra 23:54, 17 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Sentences are still nearly identical to the present sources. Still needs to be corrected. DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 11:13, 18 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I attempted to fix up the wording to not make it look the same as in the CNN document. Sorry if this is still not acceptable. SirMoo (talk) 21:53, 18 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
It looks better now, thanks. Tempodivalse [talk] 01:21, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I rewrote the other section that was posing a copyright issues. Can we have another review please. SirMoo (talk) 17:49, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review[edit]

Revision 836059 of this article has been reviewed by Killing Vector (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 17:22, 18 June 2009 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: I'll reserve judgement on copyright for now, but everything else looks OK. The mining sentence is still a bit too close for my taste, what do people think? Killing Vector (talk) 17:22, 18 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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Revision 836059 of this article has been reviewed by Killing Vector (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 17:22, 18 June 2009 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: I'll reserve judgement on copyright for now, but everything else looks OK. The mining sentence is still a bit too close for my taste, what do people think? Killing Vector (talk) 17:22, 18 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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I don't doubt you. Even I said the same thing above. Point out the exact sentences, and I will see what I can do :-) DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 20:06, 18 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The copyvio issues seem to have been resolved by user:SirMoo. I've put the article back up for re-review. Tempodivalse [talk] 01:21, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Would it be possible to get another review? SirMoo (talk) 17:49, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
This sentence But the vermiculite was contaminated with tremolite asbestos, a particularly toxic form of asbestos that has been linked to mesothelioma, a cancer that can attack the lining of the lungs, abdomen or heart.[sic] is still a copyviolation This page explains some of the aspects of writing without incurring plagiarism and this article shows examples of what constitutes plagiarism when placing copyrighted text into your own words.
  • Also I am sure it was the two mining companies which mined vermiculate, and not the civic government The the town of Libby began producing vermiculite, a mineral that is often used in insulation. [sic]
  • I am not sure what a declared Wednesday is...The Obama administration is now declaring a "public health emergency" and giving Libby new clean-up and medical assistance under a declared Wednesday.[sic]

These above have now been addressed, I believe.SriMesh | talk 18:36, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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Spoken Wikinews[edit]

I was finding mistakes where editing has gone a bit frey in every paragraph. I'm going to hold off reading it until it gets a bit more work done to it. --James Pain (talk) 18:35, 20 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

After advice from IRC, I took this down from being published because it was unreadable for Spoken Wikinews. Sentences like:

  • "A study conducted between by the Agency for Toxic Substance and..."
  • "On Wednesday, the Obama administration declared Libby and area a "public health emergency""
  • "in the population of mine site area higher than the national average."

They and many more could use fixing. --James Pain (talk) 18:47, 20 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

All fixed, cheers St-Lemur --James Pain (talk) 19:56, 20 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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