Talk:State of emergency in Sri Lanka remains despite calm returning after violence

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Review of revision 4389263 [Not ready][edit]


Not sure if the title suffices anymore. But anything else that was more descriptive quickly turned into a whole paragraph each time I tried to think of something. So any ideas are appreciated. --SVTCobra 13:55, 11 March 2018 (UTC)


"Greater police presence was unable to prevent the attack on the Muslim-owned restaurant at 4:00 AM local time in the city in the North Western Province."

1. I'd perhaps want to see more details about the attack. It's the sort-of focal event but little detail is provided about it.

2. To make this attack connected to the rest of the story evidence needs to be provided to demonstrate that the attack was politically motivated (as opposed to, say, a random robbery). --Gryllida (talk) 01:48, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

As you may have noticed, the sources listed really don't have more detail. Searching now for other sources, everything I found were just versions of the sources I already had, being passed around on the newswires. So much so that I began to question whether it had happened at all. That is, until I found the article (see below) from today. It, unfortunately, does not provide more detail, but it does show the recovery efforts by the local community.
And a source (again no details) about an arrest:
So you see, I don't have much to work with. Anamaduwa is a small place. I will try to expand a little. --SVTCobra 06:27, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

Review of revision 4389715 [Not ready][edit]

In my opinion, starting every paragraph with a day or date makes it feel much more like a list instead of prose. I was deliberately trying not to sound encyclopedic when recapping the last ten or so days events. I complied nevertheless in an effort to get this article published. --SVTCobra 09:06, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Current review[edit]

@Pi zero: As this is your third crack at this (at least), I know you are already quite familiar with a lot of the material. I wanted to point out to you (if you hadn't noticed), I tried to be very descriptive in my edit summaries including referencing paragraphs by number. This might prove helpful in the current review. Cheers, --SVTCobra 21:09, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Review of revision 4390038 [Passed][edit]