Talk:Sydney, Australia woman who "spontaneously" murdered boyfriend in "fatal explosion of emotion" sentenced

Review of revision 4715429 [Not ready]

Revision 4715429 of this article has been reviewed by Heavy Water (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 20:00, 11 March 2023 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: Article does not state the "when" of the focal event. This should be in the lead. Comments by reviewer: @QuantumControl. This looks like another very good one, so hopefully we can get to review soon. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 4715429 of this article has been reviewed by Heavy Water (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 20:00, 11 March 2023 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: Article does not state the "when" of the focal event. This should be in the lead. Comments by reviewer: @QuantumControl. This looks like another very good one, so hopefully we can get to review soon. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Paywall

I really hate to do this in between a review...@Heavy Water, Sydney Morning Herald is paywalled. JJLiu112 (talk) 07:28, 12 March 2023 (UTC)

I've been able to access it just fine. QuantumControl (talk) 07:32, 12 March 2023 (UTC)

I see. Looks like it's a registration 'wall, then. False alarm, sorry. JJLiu112 (talk) 07:32, 12 March 2023 (UTC)

I actually haven't gotten to the parts referenced by the SMH. Heavy Water (talk) 14:29, 12 March 2023 (UTC)

Review of revision 4715840 [Passed]

Revision 4715840 of this article has been reviewed by Heavy Water (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 03:51, 13 March 2023 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: @QuantumControl: Thank you for the invisible comments for sourcing, they helped greatly. And this is yet another great article. Some editing was done for distance from source and style; also fixed some punctuation mistakes and stand-alone quotes. Had some trouble with where we should place the sentencing remarks; obviously, as part of the focal event, it should be first per WN:PYRAMID, but I think it is now contextualized enough in the lead one can understand the remarks fine before reading the full timeline. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4715840 of this article has been reviewed by Heavy Water (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 03:51, 13 March 2023 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: @QuantumControl: Thank you for the invisible comments for sourcing, they helped greatly. And this is yet another great article. Some editing was done for distance from source and style; also fixed some punctuation mistakes and stand-alone quotes. Had some trouble with where we should place the sentencing remarks; obviously, as part of the focal event, it should be first per WN:PYRAMID, but I think it is now contextualized enough in the lead one can understand the remarks fine before reading the full timeline. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Also, please remember Wikinews always uses MDY dates, despite allowing the author to use their preference for other regional variations in language. I note that the murder did not actually occur in a carpark, despite multiple outlets saying that; it happened in a garage, as the video obviously shows. --Heavy Water (talk) 03:57, 13 March 2023 (UTC)

Edit

{{editprotected}} Please Wiktionary-link {{wikt|SC}} and wikilink {{w|Darlinghurst Courthouse}} and {{w|Concord Repatriation General Hospital}}. Heavy Water (talk) 01:06, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Done Although, I linked to SC instead of Wiktionary. --:SVTCobra 10:17, 1 May 2023 (UTC)