Talk:Two rockets hit southern Beirut

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Review of revision 1909067 [Passed][edit]

Revision 1909067 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 13:21, 26 May 2013 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • There were some passages too close to the sources (including one long verbatim run). Don't start with source passages and 'scuff them up'; avoid source phrase structure and sources' peculiar turns of phrase and word-choices.
  • This did well on synthesizing material from multiple sources, in some cases within a single sentence.
  • See detailed history of edits during review.

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1909067 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 13:21, 26 May 2013 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • There were some passages too close to the sources (including one long verbatim run). Don't start with source passages and 'scuff them up'; avoid source phrase structure and sources' peculiar turns of phrase and word-choices.
  • This did well on synthesizing material from multiple sources, in some cases within a single sentence.
  • See detailed history of edits during review.
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Categories[edit]

{{edit protected}} Please move this article from Category:Syria to Category:Syrian Civil War. Thank you. Green Giant (talk) 17:20, 1 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Added to the latter. --Pi zero (talk) 01:37, 2 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Edit[edit]

{{editprotected}} "Two rockets hit the south of Lebanon's capital Beirut today, injuring three or more people." It should be clarified that the location was the southern part of Beirut, not that Beirut is the capital of "southern Lebanon", which isn't a political region. Perhaps "Two rockets hit the south side of Beirut, Lebanon's capital, today, injuring three or more people." Heavy Water (talk) 00:31, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I think the proposed edit is even worse, when it could be interpreted as 'Beirut, which is Lebanon's capital' or 'the capital of Lebanon, which is in Beirut'. Perhaps 'two rockets struck a district in southern Beirut, Lebanon, injuring three or more people' if we really must make a change. But we needn't in this case, I dare say. JJLiu112 (talk) 15:08, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I do not think the original wording is confusing or ambiguous, albeit it a bit clunky. I'd hate to make substantial changes to wording in an article which is nearly ten years old. --SVTCobra 13:23, 14 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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